Forum Post: Rights - Poem
Posted 1 year ago on Feb. 6, 2012, 5:25 p.m. EST by ykaz
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from New York, NY
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You have the right to/ remain silent/ to sit down/ and watch tv/
You have the right to/ support democracy/ in the Arab World/ and judge their rulers/
You have the right to/ walk on the street,/ quickly, quietly, with/ everyone else/
You have the right to/ not be detained for/ more than 48 hours/ without a charge/
Anything you say / or do or don’t/ can and will be used/ against you/
You have the right to/ remain silent/ now sit down/ shut up and/ watch tv./
Yuri Kazakov 15/10/11
This method of posting doesn't allow for too much formatting.
This is a poem I wrote a long time ago back in October after attending the #ows movement on Times Square. I wasn't really sure about posting it until now. Enjoy, comment, critique.
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Thank you!
Yup, I'd make the line breaks a little differently, but I like it.
It isn't a pretty poem, but neither is the subject.
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Yessss indeed.
I like it. But I think everyone around here already knows - I'm a little twisted.
I would make the first line of each stanza end on an accented foot -
When you end with the last syllable on a high note, it makes it more forceful, which I think in this case is exactly what you want.
If you say the first line with a bit of anger, you almost can't help but say the next three as a sneer.